Hi I’m Dimmy and it is my birthday and I got some yellow roller skates so lets try them out. Yeah this is so fun, oh no I’m getting out of control oh no a wasp nest ahhhhhhhh! go away swarm of wasps there so tiny but dangerous I’m sorry I’m in the Hospital mummy. Why is my mum crying. Five days later he had a cast on his arm and he was still swelled up from the wasps. Dimmy finely got his cast off and on his yellow roller skates and fell into a pool and swam out of it.
Zara,
The narrator in your tale seems to have had some unfortunate experiences on those roller skates. Maybe they need to take up a less dangerous hobby?
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA